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Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while others think that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Most of the people argue that exploring
space
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 is not essential, while others suggest, it is important to investigate about the planet. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both the views and give my opinion. On one hand, the world has so many primitive problems that need to solve other than spending money and time
on
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in
 outer
space
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. There are a lot of countries in the
african
a native or inhabitant of Africa
African
 continent, where people are not getting their basic needs. They
dont
do not
don't
 have enough food, clothes and a shelter.
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 of spending funds for investigating the galaxy, the developed countries should help
the poor
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poorer
 nations
to meet
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meet
 their fundamental requirements.
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, studies about the outer
space
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 gave the humanity innumerable advantages. A lot of
problems including
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problems, including
 the depletion in the ozone layer and global warming are the results of
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 investigation. It
also
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 helped to understand about the climate change and different natural calamities.
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, the increase in population made the scientists to study about different planets where mankind can live. In conclusion, studying about the universe is a necessary thing, it will give the humans a lot of information about the changes
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occuring
come to pass
occurring
to
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in
 our nature. But, the countries doing the research about the universe should consider the poor nations prior to spend
large amount
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large amounts
a large amount
 on their
space
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 projects. As they are doing all these for the well being of mankind, they should consider solving the elementary issues of the world
first
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • astronomical costs
  • earthbound issues
  • tangible benefits
  • technological spin-offs
  • innovation
  • long-term investment
  • habitability
  • interplanetary travel
  • sustainable exploration
  • spacefaring nations
  • international collaboration
  • deep space
  • the final frontier
  • cosmic perspective
  • frontiers of science
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