IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrival in different parts of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrival in different parts of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #tourist #parts #world #features #comparisons
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The graph illustrates the number of international
travelers
Change the spelling
travellers
show examples
 who arrived at
five
 distinct regions in the world during a 15-year period.
Overall
, all figures for
five
Correct article usage
the five
show examples
 areas witnessed
the
Correct article usage
an
show examples
 upward trend, except
a
Change preposition
for a
show examples
slight decrease
of
Change preposition
in
show examples
 North America in the
last
five
 years of the period. In 1990, the total of foreign visitors in North America was 70
million
, which was the highest among
five
Correct article usage
the five
show examples
 regions, and more than doubled the statistic of Central and Eastern Europe. In the
next
 fifteen years, the figure for Central and Eastern Europe experienced a threefold increase compared to that in 1990, which
finally
 peaked at nearly 90
million
. Meanwhile, the number of North American international tourists in 2000 hit the highest point at 90
million
 before minimally decreasing to nearly the same figure for Central and Eastern Europe in 2005. In the remaining three areas, the statistics of Sub-Saharan Africa and South America began at under 10
million
 in 1990
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 and did not witness dramatic increases, which
finally
 stayed at under 20
million
 each in 2005. At the same time,
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
South-East Asia experienced a 30-
million
 growth, from more than 20
million
 in 1995 to under 50
million
 in 2005.
Submitted by jeremyykr on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words five, million with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: