The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007 šŸ˜‚

The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007

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The bar chart illustrates how many
hours
adolescents in Chester spent on several activities each week between 2002 and 2007.šŸ¤£
Overall
, the most popular activity over the period given was watching TV,
whereas
bowling was the least favourite. Going to pubs and discos, watching TV and shopping all showed an increase in the number of
hours
teenager
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spent on these activities. The other pursuits showed a decrease in
hours
, except watching
DVD's
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which fluctuated.
Young
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The young
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generation spent 25
hours
watching television in the initial year (2002) which increased to almost 40
hours
per week in the final year (2007). Both going to pubs and discos, and shopping, more than doubled in
hours
from over 5 to 15 in 2007.
While
teenagers occupied 10
hours
doing homework every week in 2002, the same figure dropped to just over 5
hours
in 2007. Playing sports fell more dramatically from 10
hours
to 3
hours
. Bowling was under 5
hours
weekly throughout the entire period. The number of
hours
teenagers dedicated to watching
DVD's
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was only 10
hours
in the initial and final years
,
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but reached a peak of over 15
hours
in consecutive years 2004 and 2005.
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