Some say that people living in high-rise apartments are lonely and unhappy, while others say that it is advantageous to stay in high-rise apartments. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Undoubtedly, in past time individuals did not live in
apartment but
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an apartment, but
an apartment but
the apartment but
apartments but
nowadays
people mainly
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people, mainly
like to live in
apartment
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an apartment
the apartment
apartments
.
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.
Few humans deem that people are unhappy and lonely who are living in
high -rise
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a high - rise apartment
apartment
.
However
,
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
believe that there are so many merits of staying in
high- rise appartment
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a high - rise apartment
high - rise apartment
high - rise apartments
. I agree with
latter view point
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the latter view point
.
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I will discuss both views in
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the upcoming paragraphs
. There are
upmteen
innumerable but many
umpteen
advantage
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advantages
.
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First
and foremost, in
apartment
lot of facilities are available as
apartment
provides security guard by
this
not outsider is
enter
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entered
without the permission
.
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.
So, high -rise
apartment
is very helpful for professional people and they can live safe life.
Moreover
, people
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their dream through
apartment
because some individuals do not able to make own house and attached new facilities
,
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,
while in high rise
apartment
they enjoy all advantage like big garden and swimming pool
,
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,
air conditioning room and so on. On the other hand, some individuals say that there are
lotof
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a lot of
lot of
lots of
demerits.
First
of all, they think that people in own houses mainly humans live in
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
environment in which people are busy
in
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at
with
work and
no body
a person of no influence
nobody
have time to meet with each other and apartments always choose small family
.
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.
So
,
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,
they live under stress and
a lone
without any others being included or involved
alone
. To conclude, different individuals have different
thinking but
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thinking, but
I opine that high rise
apartment
is very
fruitfull
feeling or showing gratitude
grateful
for all
that is
the best choice of
person
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the person
.
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