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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Online education has become a common feature over the past few years. While there are some drawbacks of internet-based learning, I support the view that the benefits outweigh than the drawbacks of
this
 trend. On the one hand, there are some reasons why people do not want to take the online courses.
Firstly
, the main reason is that students get less direct interaction during their class. It means that by studying via internet, face to face communication or
dicussions
an extended communication (often interactive) dealing with some particular topic
discussions
discussion
 with their peers or their professionals are impossible
.
Accept space
.
Instead
 of face
interation
a mutual or reciprocal action; interacting
interaction
integration
,
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,
 the students must communicate by written form which might bring less motivation for them.
Secondly
, while the traditional classes can support their students to attend seminars, the students of online
classess
a collection of things sharing a common attribute
classes
class
classics
 only can join the discussion via website forum areas.
On the other hand
, I support the view that there are various advantages of online education can bring to our society.
First
 of all, learners can study in a
flexiable
capable of being changed
flexible
way which
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way, which
 means they can join the class whenever or whatever they can cover their material in their own pace.
Furthermore
, the cost of online study will be reduced by the increasing of number students
enrollment
.
This
 leads to the increase of revenue
instituions
an organization founded and united for a specific purpose
institutions
.
Finally
, online learning can open for everyone, regardless of age, distance or background which
contribute
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contributes
 to the enrich knowledge of communities. In conclusion, while there still have some negative developments of studying online, the positive side bring more benefits for our society.
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