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some say that people living in high-rise apartments are lonely and unhappy, while others say that it is advantageous to stay in high-rise apartments. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#say #people #apartments
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As through the passage of time
,
Accept space
,
 population
in
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from
 all over the world is increasing day by day and by
this
 people facing problems to stay and mostly likes to move in
appartments
a suite of rooms usually on one floor of an apartment house
apartments
apartment
.
some
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Some
 think life in high rise buildings is unhappy
amd
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 for some life is good in these buildings.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will shed light on both views in
upcoming paragraphs
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the upcoming paragraphs
. To start with, the advantages of high rise buildings are
,
Accept space
,
people can see a lot of things around
there
of them or themselves
their
 locality
,
Accept space
,
 natural places like parks, lakes
,
Accept space
,
ponds and many things.
Moreover
, some like to stay in nuclear families, so
this
 is the best place for them to live because they make
there
of them or themselves
their
 mind to live alone which is
best thing
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the best thing
.
Accept space
.
On the other hand
, there are some demerits like availability of things is very tough, because one can do not take furniture on 5TH floor by stairs, so these kind of things make it
unchoiced
release
uncorked
uncooked
unscathed
 for people.
Furthermore
, in my point of view, a
people
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person
 could not leave happy in these buildings and
also
 will feel lonely.At the end living in
a
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an
 apartment is
advantegious
giving an advantage
advantageous
advantages
 or not is totally depending on people to people. To conclude, nowadays apartments are more
preferrable
more desirable than another
preferable
 place to live as
compare
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compared
 to other places.
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