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the number of students studying science at university is constantly declining. what do you think are the causes and effects on society.

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In the past couple of years, university education and students' perspective towards different subjects have changed tremendously. Now, mostly youngsters are loosing their interest towards
science
 due to which number of students in
this
 field are declining at a constant rate.
This
 trend has various causes and effects which I intend to enumerate in the upcoming paragraphs. To initiate with, the
first
 and foremost reason of reduced number of
science
 students at university is unemployment. At present, a large proportion of Engineers and
science
 graduates are unemployed all over the world. In
past
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the past
, professions like Doctors and Engineering field were considered to be highly paid. But now, the situation is
reverse
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reversed
.
This
 time, people are taking more interest in Art and its related courses.
This
 is because of better job options.
For example
, reality shows are trending nowadays.
Such
plateforms
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platforms
, not only provide good career choices to
people but
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people, but
also
 it brings name and fame to them in the society.
Although
this
 drift has not much short-term impact, but its long-term
affects
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effects
 could be worse.
Firstly
, it can be impactful for the economy of
country
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the country
a country
. If
this
 mindset remained continue, there would be no more qualified technical minds in the community. Owing to
this
,
government
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the government
 has to hire professionals from outside the nation for every single technological task.
This
 will lead to a lot of investment.
Secondly
, there would be shortage of
science
 teachers. That means, even
further
 generation would not be able to easily find a
science
 professor for themselves. To recapitulate, one of the major
cause
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causes
 of reduction in
science
degreeholders
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degree holders
 is the lack of employment in
this
 field and if it remained to grow at the same rate, it will create
economical
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economic
 problems for the countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • perceive
  • challenging
  • demanding
  • humanities
  • exposure
  • discourage
  • financial incentives
  • shortage
  • skilled professionals
  • technological progress
  • innovation
  • economic growth
  • global challenges
  • scientific literacy
  • informed decisions
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