in some countries many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past . do you think this is a positive or negative development?

People who live in
industrialiesd
made industrial; converted to industrialism
industrialized
industrialised
and developed country prefer to live alone more than the ones who live in traditional country. Living
alone specialy
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alone, especially
alone especially
alone specially
alone specialise
in young generation feels kind of
independency
freedom from control or influence of another or others
independence
and getting enough mature to handle
life
and accept
life
responsibility.
For example
, in
western country
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western countries
after age of 18
,
Accept space
,
individuals leave
parental home
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the parental home
and start the new
life
, and it will help them to learn how to manage the
life
and learn how to face the problems.
However
, these means of
accaumodation
making or becoming suitable; adjusting to circumstances
accommodation
accommodations
is not always positive as the people getting married and establish a family. Human beings are social creatures and the connection to the others is vital for the health and wellbeing and in more modern and
industrials
of or relating to or resulting from industry
industrial
society feeling loneliness is getting rise because the youth generation prefer to live alone
instead
of getting married and have a family
members
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member
.
Moreover when
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Moreover, when
people choose to live
alone they
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alone, they
will be less secure in the society.
For example
a lonely 18
years
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year
old youth easily getting
manipulate
Suggestion
manipulated
with the bad friends and may choose the wrong way, like smoking drugs or addicted to the
alchohole
a liquor or brew containing alcohol as the active agent
alcohol
.
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