In some countries it is now illegal to reject someone applying for a job because of his or her age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In these recent years, it has relatively become common

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the

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criteria from the application form.

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, nowadays the

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of an applicant doesn’t seem to be the main criteria. In my view, I believe it is a positive development.

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issue in applying for

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has been very controversial around the world. Many

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face it

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when they

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to apply for a job. There have been numerous complaints about

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' behaviour in front of elder

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this

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is called Ageism. Ageism is stereotyping or discrimination against individuals or groups on the basis of their

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, there have been numerous complaints against

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who treat elder individuals with no respect. Many

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have lost their

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because they are considered old.

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, based on evidence, elder

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complain about being refused interest-free credit, a new credit card or travel insurance because of their

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. Many

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believe these attitudes against elderly individuals are highly inequitable. All the negations have led

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local governments to come up with new regulations. Nowadays, there are some signs of hope.

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, it used to be like,

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that manual

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which

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a lot of physical skills might be demanding for elder

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, so they

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them immediately and didn’t even take their possible abilities into consideration. Or even when a company wanted to hire an attorney or an accountant they refused to hire an elder person, they would have thought maybe their knowledge is not updated and they cannot work professionally with computers or advanced software.

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, nowadays there are some signs of hope.

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seems like in many countries they examine elderly

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people

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skills.

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, maybe it is true that some sorts of

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are not appropriate for every

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it still

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right for

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to ignore applicants or treat

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a not apt way.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

age discrimination
inclusive workplace
workplace diversity
workforce experience
equality in hiring
age-related stereotypes
demographic changes
economic growth
social security systems
consumer spending
non-discriminatory policies
bias
fair practices
retirement age
intergenerational collaboration

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In some countries it is now illegal to reject someone applying for a job because of his or her age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

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Some people think that we learn best through in person interaction with the teacher in a classroom. Others believe that learning is more effective. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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