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Topic: a great city should not be confounded with a populous one. Discuss the above statement and give your own opinion

#topic #city
(There is no doubt that) A
city
 (can be) is generally defined as a permanent and densely settled place with extensive systems.
However
, (“a great
city
 should not be confounded with a populous one”.) (Paraphrase the given topic, please.)
This
 piece of writing is going to cast light on the above statement. In the
first
 place, a densely populated
city
 may not be regarded as a great one. As a matter of fact, a populous
city
 possibly engender(s) numerous disadvantages. If the population is rapidly growing, there will not be sufficient accommodation to meet the demand. It
also
 poses a negative impact on water supplies, fuel and other resources.
In addition
, crowded cities are confronted with environmental
problems namely
Accept comma addition
problems, namely
 pollution and global warming as well.
For instance
, a large number of households directly dump sewage into the rivers
,
Accept space
,
hence
, they take a toll on the quality of water.
Furthermore
,
city
-dwellers are beset with social issues, in which class (distinction) discrepancy is the most typical.
(
Accept space
(
Elucidate
this
 point with more details.)
Second
 of all, a great
city
 can be distinguished from others by these following factors.
(
Accept space
(
To illustrate) Specifically, a sizeable
city
 provides its inhabitants with abundant space for
accomodation
making or becoming suitable; adjusting to circumstances
accommodation
accommodations
, transportation, working as well as entertainment. By providing a sense of satisfaction, it can improve people’s living standards more than any other kind of settlement.
Moveover
Suggestion
Move over
, a great
city
 (is attributed to) is
also
 judged on the criteria of (the development of
economy
Suggestion
the economy
)
socio-economic
involving social as well as economic factors
socioeconomic
 development, cultural diversity, education, healthcare and security system as well.
Therefore
, it can be an appropriate and ideal place for high-flyers to live and work.
(
Accept space
(
Why). As a consequence, those people can take advantage of chances to startup and (
flourishly
) succeed/ flourish. In conclusion, a great
city
 can be populous, but a densely populated
city
 may not be considered as an (admirable) a
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 one. From my personal perspective, a
city
 with equality is the most worthy
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Confound
  • Populous
  • Cultural heritage
  • Urban design
  • Sustainability
  • Quality of life
  • Efficient governance
  • Overcrowding
  • Infrastructure
  • Urban sprawl
  • Economic growth
  • Cosmopolitan
  • Public services
  • Metropolis
  • Urban planning
  • Environmental footprint
  • Inclusivity
  • Civic amenities
  • Heritage conservation
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