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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some would argue that adolescence is the happiest stage of life, while others think that
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 happens in adulthood.
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 teenagers have fewer responsibilities and more leisure
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 than adults, the
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 group develops better levels of
happiness
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 associated with their success. On the one hand, during adulthood, people tend to achieve their goals in different fields
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 as professional, social, and personal and
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 makes them happy.
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, the amount of responsibilities and pressure on their work and families leads to dissatisfaction and stress. To exemplify, a research carried out by the London University, found that 85% of adults felt happy when they finished their degrees.
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, after 5 years of working, they developed job dissatisfaction and the percentage of
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 decrease by 20%. I,
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, believe that despite the success that adults have, it is not enough to develop
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.
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, teenagers only have the responsibility to study and obtain good results. Indeed, they have plenty of
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 to do recreational activities
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 as spending
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 with their friends and doing sports which leads to
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.
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, in a recent New York Times article that highlighted that 75% of people mentioned that the teenage years were the happiest stage of their lives.
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, I believe that due to the lack of responsibilities and freedom, the teenage years are the happiest ones. In conclusion,
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 adults feel success associated with their achievements in different fields, teenagers tend to develop higher levels of
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 related to their leisure
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 and lack of responsibilities
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