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the media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors

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In recent years, news and social networking usually focus on posting about the famous people’s lives
such
 as singers, actors.
On the other hand
, many people suppose that
media
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the media
 should report more on the lives of normal people. I totally agree with
this
 statement.
Firstly
, the lives of famous people are unrelated to us. Everything about them
always appear
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always appears
 on social networking.
For example
, a
celebrity’s
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celebrity
 wedding
last
 year, which all information and photos of the wedding were uploaded too much on the Internet.
At
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In
On
 those days, I could see everything about the ceremony on Facebook, Instagram, even on tv.
Secondly
, I think the media should concern more about the community because we can see all the good things that from
usual people
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the usual people
everyday
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every day
.
For instance
, in many poor areas, volunteers often donate food, clothes and money to people who have
difficult life
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a difficult life
difficult lives
.
Moreover
, a fireman can jump into a burning house or building to rescue people and pets.
Furthermore
, when I was on the street, I could see some traffic police gave a bottle of water to each person. After all these things, I think if the social network
pay
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pays
 more attention to the normal people’s lives, everyone can absorb something helpful from it.
Besides
, many people love reading more about the lives of well-known people. They think that the relationships and lives of celebrities are very interesting.
For instance
, when people see news about famous people
such
 as their lifestyle, houses. Many of them will dream about it and that will be their motivation to try and maybe they can have their own lives like the idols.
In addition
, some children love football and they want to learn something from their idols if they want to be like them. In conclusion, I think that the media should report more on the community, the lives of ordinary people to have good effects on society
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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