Some people think that qualities a person needs to become succesfull in today's world cannot be learned at university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In the mod
ern and co
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the most modern
mpete
tive societ
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
y, it is undeniable that we must equip ourselves woth pl
enty
expresses the means used
with
of knowledge in order to succed
in lif
attain success or reach a desired goal
succeed
e. Personally, i agree
refers to the speaker or writer
I
with
this
notion. In the following paragraphs i will
p
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I
ut forth my arguments to support my point of view.
Firstly
, it is certainly true that high ed
ucational system is of
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the high educational system
paramount importance for certain professions.
This
means that, without both propper
traini
marked by suitability or rightness or appropriateness
proper
ng and knowledge, it would be impossible for specialists to perform the best careers.
For instance
, if future professors acquire knowled
gs at the
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
un
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of
iversity, they will have oportun
ity to sha
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the opportunity
opportunity
an opportunity
opportunities
re their knowings for bussine
ss associ
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
ates and partners.
Nonetheless
, there are
als
o a
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is
significant number of humanity, wha are
ve
the person or persons that; the one that
who
we
what
ry succesf
ull in the
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
ir fields without gaining high kh
owle
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higher
d
ge.
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
In other words
, those who start their own bussine
ss, in ge
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
businesses
neral these people depand
solely
be contingent upon (something that is elided)
depend
on hard-working and luck. Despite
this
, i will
k
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I
eep up that without gaining essential skills and qualities from an educati
on instit
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educational
ute, a person will be unsucce
sfull.
not successful; having failed or having an unfavorable outcome
unsuccessful
Finally
, people with natural talents are
also
most likelyt
o excel
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likely to
in their life.
This
especially in sectors
such
as enterta
imennt and sp
an activity that is diverting and that holds the attention
entertainment
orts. I mean, the introduction of incresi
ng number of rea
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an increasing number
increasing number
lity shows have made it possible for all those lucky ones to triumph.
Hence
, it is evident that individuals born with talents have
also
a big chance to be successful By the way of concluo
sing, i bel
occurring at or forming an end or termination
concluding
ie
v
refers to the speaker or writer
I
e that it is indeed true that university education is pivotal in a person's life in order for one to prosper. It is recommended that the society should be educated about
this
view.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Entrepreneurial spirit
  • Innovation
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Real-world interactions
  • Adaptability
  • Resilience
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Networking opportunities
  • Specialized knowledge
  • Technological advancement
  • STEM fields
  • Academic institutions
  • Career advancement
  • Theoretical knowledge
  • Nurtured
  • Ever-changing job market
  • Diverse ideas
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