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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary.

#salary #job #satisfaction
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Some people believe higher salary packages at
work
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 is of more importance than
job
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satisfaction
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. People are of the view that
work
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satisfaction
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 should not matter much if you are earning tremendous package. Personally, I disagree with the opinion that more
money
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 is of utmost importance rather than having a
job
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satisfaction
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.Because I feel
money
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 cannot replace
satisfaction
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 in
life
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 and for leading a better
life
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,
one
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 should have
work
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-
life
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 balance.
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 of all, I am of the thinking that if you have a high paying
job
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 and there is no
satisfaction
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 working
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one
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 should not prefer the
money
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 over
satisfaction
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.
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, people working for long hours to accomplish their task just because they are highly paid are often frustrated working eventually leading to no
work
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-
life
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 balance. People who
work
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 only for
money
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 will be dissatisfied with their personal front, it may
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 lead to frustration at
work
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 as there is no peace of mind.
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 can
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 affect individual's family
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life as they just
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life just as they
 run behind
money
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,
work
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 extra for big salaries ultimately results in dissatisfaction of family
life
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.
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,
money
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 cannot buy happiness and for better living
one
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 should focus to have jobs which are more satisfying to them.
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, decent wage with
job
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satisfaction
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 will help the people focus more on task, develop proper skills set for their growth.
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, Mr. Ratan Tata the big giant of the industrial world from India, has always worked for his passion and
money
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 has automatically followed him. He has set the best example on how
work
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satisfaction
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 can help individuals increase their salaries.
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, grow better in the organization rather than just running behind the high paying jobs.
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, Studies have proved that a person with more
job
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satisfaction
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 is highly progressive.
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,
one
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 should always have better
job
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 contentment than working for a salary. In conclusion, every
one
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's perspective with regards to
job
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satisfaction
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 is different some believe salary is more important and some think the other way round. But to my way of thinking, I believe that
job
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satisfaction
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 is far more important than high yielding salaries. For
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, every individual should focus more on getting desired jobs and simultaneously
money
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 will come their way.
Submitted by pankaj_khubchandani on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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