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Nowadays longer distances are travelled by people to work and study on a daily basis . some consider it to be a negative development, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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As
this
 world moving fast, in order to achieve their dream jobs or course people are willing to work or course at anywhere in the world. In the following paragraphs, I am pointing out my opinion about
this
 subject.
Firstly
, the students who want to pursue their career mostly opt professional courses through which they can get their dream job easily. For that they are willing to travel for any long distances on a daily basis. Living standards are changing and everyone interested to live in a better prospectus. As the social, economic condition changes all of them are forced to pursue a better career or work in a stable environment in order to live in a better style. For an example the students who completed their 12th standard, most of them are choosing a course abroad programmes to study in developed countries for their career development. All these nations are open for international students' programmes and after examination few of them offers permanent resident visa too. If we think about
,
Accept space
,
 one process its good to build their dreams and we are loosing our children innovative ideas and their support to build our union.
Secondly
, in the developing countries the opportunities are not increasing due to several factors
as
Suggestion
As
 unstable government policies, strikes, political interferences, lack of technological ideas etc.. Due to these issues, unemployment increases and most of the youngsters are moving out their country to another democracy for better jobs.
For example
 from our country, most of the youngsters are moving to gulf countries for making money. If we think about
this
 deeply, in one form they are making money that will change their life to the
next
 level.
On the other hand
 they are working in another country and that will develop more compared to their native state. And after a long time they must have to return back to their own democracy because most of them working on work visas. In the above mentioned points I have discussed both the aspects and conclude that in either system its good for someone.
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