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Many people think happiness relies upon the responsibility of individuals, others think that is affected by other factors.

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People have different views on factors which
effect
the conscious subjective aspect of feeling or emotion
affect
 the prosperity. In my opinion, an individual can stay happy irrespective of the obstacles in
life
. In the contemporary era, it is very difficult to achieve self content in
life
.
This
 means that the person’s emotions is not attached to any materialistic things
life
 fortune, wealth etc.
Moreover
, they may be able to conquer the obstacles in their journey of
life
.
Such
 people live an ascetic
life
 and has a very minimalistic approach towards living.
Hence
, their emotions are not
effected
acted upon; influenced
affected
 and they have a complete control on it.
For example
, in India there are
group
Suggestion
a group
 of Monks who have donated their wealths but they still enjoy their
life
 peacefully.
On the other hand
, one evident factor, which people believe effects prosperity is to possess a lot of wealth.
This
 is because there is a belief that money can buy happiness. To elaborate, the basic standard of living is not possible to achieve without the money.
Secondly
, most people attach their prosperity with the achievements in
life
.
For instance
, a student may find happiness in achieving
first rank
Suggestion
the first rank
 in school. All the material factor
have
Suggestion
has
 a negative impact on an individual because his happiness is tied to a condition where if it is not fulfilled he may get into depression. According to a recent study, people whose
emotions
Suggestion
Emotions
 are
effected
acted upon; influenced
affected
 by outside factors tend to be anxious in nature. In conclusion,
although
 a goal in
life
 is important as it motivates an individual to perform
well but
Accept comma addition
well, but
 the emotions should be in control of an individual.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • individual responsibility
  • personal mindset
  • proactive steps
  • self-improvement
  • socio-economic status
  • relationships
  • environmental conditions
  • external factors
  • positive attitude
  • pursuit of happiness
  • facilitate
  • hamper
  • proactive engagement
  • sense of achievement
  • conducive environment
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