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In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important. This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life. Do you agree or disagree?

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Due to the globalisation era, the world has experienced dramatic changes, especially in regards to corporations which are spread around the world. As a consequence, their products are available everywhere.
Nonetheless
, the expansion of big business has both advantages and disadvantages.
To begin
 with, the expansion of corporations is a reason for reducing the unemployment rate.
In other words
, big companies can help governments to address the problem of unemployment by creating more job opportunities.
Moreover
, another benefit of multinational companies is a significant increase in consumer choice. By virtue of
this
 fact, local people will have more products to choose. Indeed, an increase in consumer choice has another positive side
such
 as competition.
Furthermore
, based on economic law, proper competition among the companies generates rapid growth in innovation, improvements in quality and in price reduction.
However
, there are some disadvantages of multinational companies and their products.
Firstly
, the intercontinental company could become a monopoly with the help of resources and power. In fact, by dominating in the market,
such
 a corporation questions the existence of competitors.
Secondly
, multinational companies could have an effect on the pollution level within the region, due to production volumes and factory size.
As a result
, pollution level can get out of control without proper supervision.
Besides
, intercontinental businesses create one-way raw materials consumption.
In other words
, many multinationals go into a new country looking to extract taw materials
such
 as oil or precious metals. All in all, despite that multinational companies damaging peoples' quality of life, I believe that the country may benefit from it.
Additionally
, intercontinental businesses
also
 improve the economy of the country, provide job opportunities for locals and encourage competition.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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