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With the development of technology children are now living in a world that is completely different to what it was 50 years ago. What problems does this cause for society and the family?

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Since the mid of the 20th century,
technology
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 has been developed significantly,
this
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development
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affect
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affects
 a lot of
humans
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human
 lives, especially on children. Some people believe that
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development
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 of
technology
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 has many advantages, while others argue that
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development
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 has a negative impact on
people
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peoples'
peoples
 lives.
This
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 essay will discuss the negative impact of the
technology
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 on the society and on the family.
Firstly
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, the
development
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 of
technology
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 affect badly the family
members
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members'
member
 relationships. These days, family members are spending less hours together than they were in the past. Recent research, which was conducted
in
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at
 the Washington University, has shown that the American families are spending lesser time together, they only spend 5 hours weekly, while in the past they were meeting for more than 20 hours per a week.
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, it seems clear that the
development
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 of
technology
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 affects negatively the family relationships.
Secondly
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, the
development
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 of
technology
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 has led to spread many diseases. These days, people suffer from many diseases due to watching TV and computer for longer hour.
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, according to the recent
study which
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study, which
 was conducted in Jordan University of Science and
Technology
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, 70% of Jordanian people suffer from diseases due to sitting for
longer
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long
 hours working on their computers.
Thus
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, the
development
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 of
technology
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 has contributed to
spread
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the spread
 of diseases. In conclusion,
this
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 essay discussed the problems which are developed due to
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technology
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technological
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development
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developing
. In my opinion, I believe that these technologies affect on
people
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peoples'
peoples
 lives badly.
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