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What are the advantage and disadvantage of leaving your country to live or study abroad

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Nowadays, many of people go to abroad in order to
study
 or event to live. And there are some benefits and drawbacks of leaving your
country
 or
study
 abroad. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides that
study
 and live foreign
country
. For the our childhood, we make a dream
study
 abroad and live there, because we can see surprisingly pictures videos and more polite people. And
also
, the life
seem
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seems
 much better and
easy
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easier
. Studying and
leaving
the experience of being alive; the course of human events and activities
living
 abroad give us plenty of opportunities,
such
 as, higher standards of
leaving
the experience of being alive; the course of human events and activities
living
 in urban areas, better health care systems, more educational facilities and more job opportunities. So that, abroad life is more attractive and more vibrate.
Actually it
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Actually, it
 is not so bad,
dont
do not
don't
 be afraid. But there are some disadvantages of leaving your
country
 or
study
 abroad as well.
Firstly
, you are out of your culture, so that you have to learn a lot and
this
 take much time and patient, and, you
fell
mat together and make felt-like
felt
 homesick.
Secondly
, unless can you speak as
native language
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a native language
? On the other hands, you need affordable
house
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housing
 and good job opportunities to live better.
Yes it's
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Yes, it's
 sound really bad. In conclusion, there are both
advantage
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advantages
 and disadvantages of leaving your
country
 or
study
 foreign
country
. I think that we believe our dreams, because they are moved us to be successful.
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