Some movies are serious, designed to make the audience think. Other movies are designed primarily to amuse and entertain. Which type of movie do you prefer?

Nowadays youngsters select listening to
music
instead
of listening to the news on the radio.
This
essay will
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
the good points of listening to
music
and good points of interest in the news. 34 On the one hand, nowadays the majority of young people interested in
music
. For many youths,
music
is a necessary part of their life.
Firstly
Accept comma addition
Firstly, music
music
has a great effect on a teenager's mood.
For instance
, many famous bloggers recommend listening to
music
when you are in a bad mood.
Secondly
,
music
can give us inspiration.
For example
, famous psychology said that
music
in the morning can give a lot of inspiration all day. 76
On the other hand
, listening to the news should be important for teenagers, as they must be involved in the modern problems.
For example
, listening to
music
can help to get some information for education.
Secondly
, listening to the news can develop our mind, it is good for self-education.
For instance
, the majority of people who involved in politics very clever. 57 In conclusion, I will tell you my personal opinion.
Music
is a big part of my life, it helps me in different moments, but
also
it is important to be involved in modern problems.34 Alexa
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