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The line graph illustrates the temperatures in Paris, Boston and Melbourne every month. At
first
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 glance it clear that
weather
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the weather
 in Parise and Boston is warmer than in Melbourne during the summer time.
However
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, the temperatures in former two cities
is
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are
 lower than in Melbourne from October to May. In winter the temperature in Boston levels out at 5
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degree
Suggestion
degrees
under
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below
 zero, the during spring time it grows sharply until 24
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degree
Suggestion
degrees
. It
hits
Suggestion
hit
 a peak at the
point
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 of approximately 32 in August, after that it has a gradual reduction.
Similarly
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, the temperature in Paris has the same trend. It reaches the lowest
point
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 in January at nearly 3
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degree
Suggestion
degrees
,
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
 it increases steadily July (24) and levels off for one month
then
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 declines moderately to 4
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degree
Suggestion
degrees
 in December. The Melbourne trend is absolutely opposite, it started from the
point
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 of 26 in January,
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
 it reduced by 10 degrees and hit the bottom at 16, after that it climbed mildly
to
Suggestion
in
 December, and reached the same
point
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 as in January (26).
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