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The responsibility of bringing up children should be shared equally between mother and father. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Being a parent is one of the greatest gifts and it is their
responsibility
 to share their roles equally to look after their children. I strongly agree with
this
 statement and I would like to put my point of view with suitable examples.
Firstly
, as said it is a gift from god to become parents, as there are many peoples who are not able to become parents or children who
dont
do not
don't
 have parents vice versa. Sharing roles between parents can help each other so they can take
care
 of children equally and
also
love
 them equally, so that child
dont
do not
don't
 feel like one of their parents
dont
do not
don't
love
 them.
For example
, if only
mother
 affection and take
care
 of a toddler,
then
 baby's interaction with
mother
 will be more
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 a father and he would not talk or go to dad that much as he didn't get any
love
 from him.
Secondly
, there are single parents and it is really difficult to take
care
 of children and give them
love
 of both dad and
mother
. So we should acknowledge each other and take
responsibility
 to
love
 your minor and divide the works so they can spend as much as time possible with their kids.
For instance
, if a father can take
care
 of the child and
mother
 can cook food for the kid
then
mom
dont
do not
don't
 need to worry about what their infant doing. To summarize, Infants are more attracted to their mothers I believe as she gives birth to them, but they should be equal and balanced
love
 of both parents towards their kids.Many peoples tend to divide
this
responsibility
 between days and some tend to do it with hours, no matter what they prefer their should not be off balance. As infants are our future generation and they should cherish with more
responsibility
.
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