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Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefit that it will replace face - to - face education. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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In today's world where technology surpasses everyone's expectation, online training or learning is becoming a new trend. In my opinion, it has myriad pros than cons.
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, online learning is advantageous in times of any pandemic situation.
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: Now a
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, COVID-19 has made difficult for people to come outside of their homes. So, in
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 crucial
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, educational institutions are providing online lectures
to their
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to, their
 students so that their semester will not get wasted.
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, purchasing a learning material for some people will cost them an arm and a
leg but
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leg, but
 due to online learning facility, one may find many books from internet for free of cost.
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: There are many online websites like Studybay, Google research etc. They are providing multiple learning contents to students and one can easily learn about anything in the blink of an eye. Contrary to my view, some people would argue that face-to-face learning will be more suitable as the attention span of a learner in online learning is less. I do not agree with them because from my point of view, online learning gives a
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feeling
 of comfort.
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: In face-to-face learning, a learner has to move out from his
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home, but
 in online learning, one can easily learn from anywhere without leaving his comfort zone. Some may argue that face-to-face learning is more interactive than online learning. I do not agree with them because online learning can
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 be fruitful and interactive as it
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 provides the facility of online interaction. In conclusion, I would cut to the chase and say that online learning does not only
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save from ruin, destruction, or harm
saves
time but
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time, but
 a learner can find multiple learning materials from internet as compared to face -to-face learning.
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