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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? And give your own opinion.

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At present, studying abroad has popular as many graduates want to expand their knowledge, especially in English speaking
counties
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
.
Although
this
 option provides several advantages, those have to pay a large amount of money.
This
 essay will explore both benefits and drawbacks of
this
 statement. As most of students have
interested
Suggestion
interests
interest
 in studying abroad because it gives them more opportunity than learning in their home country. One of the advantages is that it provides the graduates good skill of language as they have to communicate with native speakers most of the
time so
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time, so
 these people might get more paid when they come
back their home country
Suggestion
back to their home country
back in their home country
 and work in an international organization.
Secondly
, these students have to live by themselves since they have left their family, making them more mature because group groups need to find the way how to survive and adapt in
new culture
Suggestion
a new culture
 and new friends.
In contrast
, studying abroad needs to spend a big amount of money to support
such
 as a tuition fee, a plane ticket, an accommodation and so on.
For instance
, my sister decided to sell her land in order to get more money and support her son studying in Australia
last
 year.
Moreover
, students who decided to study in another nation might find it difficult to make a new friend as they cannot explain in
well
Suggestion
good
 enough language,
this
 can make them feel
stress
Suggestion
stressed
 and can lead them have mental problems. To conclude, studying abroad offer a number of benefits if those can afford it. I strongly believe that it gives people more options and secure
future but
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future, but
 if it is too expensive and an individual cannot pay for it, studying in
home country
Suggestion
the home country
 is
better choices
Suggestion
a better choices
.
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