These days, more people are going to university than in the past. They start work later in life and with higher qualifications. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In today’s generation, most students prefer to enrol in a University because of better quality standards, wide resources, good social community and tremendous extracurricular activities. They usually spend more
time
and
money
to achieve
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up
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education
like earning a
degree
to achieve higher credentials. Though allotting more
time
and
money
in order to secure a
degree
from a University is significantly a financial challenge and
time consuming
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to most people, the writer firmly believes that it is a considerable form of investment for a lifetime developmental benefit. Financial is one of the biggest
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to consider in deciding to choose a
degree
in a University. Thousands per year
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required because of expensive tuition fees and school requirements.
In addition
, students who are away from their home town will
be needing
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extra cash for accommodation and daily expenses.
For instance
, in the
Philippines
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Philippines,
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the average tuition fee yearly would cost P130000 to P250000 but if you decide to upgrade to a higher level of
education
like
master’s
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a master’s
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degree
or doctorate
degree
, the cost would probably double or triple.
Thus
, it may cause
long term
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debts. After
high-school
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or college, starting a job and earning
money
can be initiated earlier but if you desire to pursue continuing
education
you will
be needing
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to utilize more
time
thus
extending the
time
when you will earn
money
. Higher degrees require 5
years
unlike
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the usual 4
years
. Medicine prerequisites a
4 year
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degree
before a student is allowed to continue a 4-year course in a medical school and
then
complete
a
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3 to 7
years
of residency. Those
years
spent studying
when
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could have been used for a job which may have given you a huge amount of
money
.
However
, bigger opportunities
awaits
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for
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those who sacrificed
time
and
money
for a higher level of
education
. Even though later in life they started earning
money
, the salary of a
degree
holder is much way more competitive because higher positions are available and promotions are more viable.
Moreover
, graduating with a
degree
would mean that you are well equipped with exceptional skills and knowledge because of advanced training and lessons taught. To summarize, attaining a
degree
for higher credentials is difficult and challenging but if students
will
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weigh the advantages that it can provide for tomorrow those problems are like a dot
that is
too small to compare with.
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