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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities around the world are now "one big traffic jam". How true do you think this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars?

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During the past three decades, there has been a rapid increase in
car
 ownership and the
traffic
 jams have spiked in a lot of cities globally,
thus
 leading to “one big
traffic
 jam”. In my opinion, I believe that having more cars owned by people is definitely becoming the cause of huge
traffic
 jams in many cities throughout the world and the Government should encourage people to use public transport and educate them about environmental hazards. The Authorities should enhance public transport facilities and accurate timing during rush hours.
Hence
, increasing more public transportation,
for instance
, increasing the number of buses, trains and metros to the popular destinations and even the frequency during the rush hours will encourage people to use public transit.
Moreover
, the big cities can introduce bike ride facilities, and bike lanes which will give people one more way of transportation and reaching faster to their work.
Furthermore
, constructing proper pedestrian roads and sidewalk will encourage people to walk. Apart from
this
, the
traffic
 authorities ought to encourage sharing cars or
car
 pooling by educating people. The Government must educate people about the detrimental effects of carbon dioxide, which is released by the cars in the environment and should encourage the innovative methods
such
 as
car
 pooling rather than using individual cars,
this
 will save money and time in the long run and
thus
, the havoc due to
traffic
 jams.
For example
, people can share their details on the sharing applications on their cell phones and can share a ride, if they have the same destination or colleagues from the same vicinity can share their cars and can take turns to drive. In conclusion,
traffic
 can be drastically reduced from the roads in metro cites by improving public transport, and by introducing new methods like sharing a
car
 ride.
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