Do you think it would be interesting for young scientists to spend weeks of science in Kazakhstan’s schools?

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my opinion in our country grow up a

lots

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lot

of clever

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young scientists.

However

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we have big problem our country can’t support them. And best

solution it’s

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solution, it’s

make

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made

science

week in Kazakhstan.

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big Universities can invite young or just people who want to improve

theirselves

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their selves

science

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nevertheless

they haven’t got opportunities. By the way Universities can make advertising theirs Programm. So that teenagers can understand what

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the University

can offer them

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Somewhat I agree it’s a little bit difficult.

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Schools should give opportunities for their students. I don’t like

science

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but it’s will be interesting for me. At

school we

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school, we

have few

science

lesson but

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lessons, but

lessons but

we teach only theories, we need more practice. So that

on the other hand

understand

how

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how, for

for instance

bacteria’s live in

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a different space

different spaces

. But unfortunately, our state does not devote time to

this

. And in schools to carry out

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, or not safe, and it is considered useless.And if

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out, then

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most often for reporting to the ministry. But I hope that one day we’ll go, that it’s important and that it’s possible with us, it will not only study

science

, but

also

see how it works in practice

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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199 words

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Do you think it would be interesting for young scientists to spend weeks of science in Kazakhstan’s schools?

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