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Do you think it would be interesting for young scientists to spend weeks of science in Kazakhstan’s schools?

#scientists #weeks #science #kazakhstan’s #schools
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In
 my opinion in our country grow up a
lots
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lot
 of clever
,
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,
young scientists.
However
,
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,
we have big problem our country can’t support them. And best
solution it’s
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solution, it’s
make
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made
 a
science
 week in Kazakhstan.
For instance
,
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,
big Universities can invite young or just people who want to improve
theirselves
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their selves
 in
science
,
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,
nevertheless
 they haven’t got opportunities. By the way Universities can make advertising theirs Programm. So that teenagers can understand what
University
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the University
 can offer them
.
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.
 Somewhat I agree it’s a little bit difficult.
Therefore
 Schools should give opportunities for their students. I don’t like
science
,
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,
but it’s will be interesting for me. At
school we
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school, we
 have few
science
lesson but
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lessons, but
lessons but
 we teach only theories, we need more practice. So that
on the other hand
 understand
how
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how, for
for instance
 bacteria’s live in
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a different space
different spaces
. But unfortunately, our state does not devote time to
this
. And in schools to carry out
this
, or not safe, and it is considered useless.And if
such
 events are carried
out
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out, then
then
 most often for reporting to the ministry. But I hope that one day we’ll go, that it’s important and that it’s possible with us, it will not only study
science
, but
also
 see how it works in practice
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