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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Both maps
ıllustrate
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illustrate
 an
island
’s changes, before and after the reorganization of tourism. As can be seen on the maps, an
island
 was unused,
whereas
 the
second
 map shows that loads of new buildings
has
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have
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 been added. The total length of
island
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the island
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 is 100 metres.
It is clear that
 the middle of
area
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the area
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 was uninhabited,
however
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,however
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 the east and
west
surrended
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surrounded
 with trees,
additionally
, the end of the
west
 part had a beach. Moving to the
second
 one, except
on
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in
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 the
west
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western
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 part, the whole area has almost changed. The accommodation areas appear
the
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in the
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 middle and the
west
 of the
island
.
Moreover
, there are
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a restaurant
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restaurant
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restaurants
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,
reception
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and reception
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 where are situated side by side. The modes of transportation are the
foothpaths-the
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footpaths-the
 main roads among houses,
as well as
 to railway-which links to
Pier-Reception-Restaurant
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the Pier-Reception-Restaurant
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 roadway. By the way, the pier is in the south of
island
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the island
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.
By contrast
,
beach
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the beach
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 did not use
as
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for
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a
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apply
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swimming.
Overall
,
an
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the
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island
 is currently based on
as
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apply
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a
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the
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 tourism industry, the man-made activity has expanded.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, west with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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