The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007.
The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007.
The bar chart illustrates the leisure hours spend on seven different activities by adolescents in Chester
a
Change preposition
in a
six year
period, commencing from 2002. Add a hyphen
six-year
Overall
, young
Add an article
a young
adult
who spend hours at the pub, shopping, watching TV and DVDs increased over six years observed, Fix the agreement mistake
adults
whereas
an invert pattern was shown in doing homework, play
sport, and bowling activities.
In detail, the majority of teenagers spent Wrong verb form
playing
the
leisure time Change the word
their
by
watching TV, 25 Change preposition
apply
watcher
in 2002-2003 and Change to a plural noun
watchers
Change the pronoun
it
its
rose remarkably to about 37 in 2007. The number of adolescents doing homework and sport were similar. Replace the word
it's
it is
However
, sport is less preferred by teenager
than Fix the agreement mistake
teenagers
homework
sector in 2007. Correct article usage
the homework
Moreover
, roughly 10 young adults watching
DVDs in 2002 and in the following 5 Wrong verb form
watched
years
the amount of DVDs Add a comma
,years
watcher
Correct your spelling
watched
were
almost identical to that of 2002. Pubs and shopping people were in a range between 7 and 17 over the period. Correct subject-verb agreement
was
On the contrary
, young
Add an article
a young
adult
who played bowling dropped gradually from 4 in 2002 to 1 in the final year.Fix the agreement mistake
adults
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