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The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007.

The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007.
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The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007. The bar chart illustrates the leisure hours spend on seven different activities by adolescents in Chester
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six year
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 period, commencing from 2002.
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young
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adult
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 who spend hours at the pub, shopping, watching TV and DVDs increased over six years observed,
whereas
 an invert pattern was shown in doing homework,
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 sport, and bowling activities. In detail, the majority of teenagers spent
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 leisure time
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watching TV, 25
watcher
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 in 2002-2003 and
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 rose remarkably to about 37 in 2007. The number of adolescents doing homework and sport were similar.
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, sport is less preferred by
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 than
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 sector in 2007.
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, roughly 10 young adults
watching
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 DVDs in 2002 and in the following 5
years
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 the amount of DVDs
watcher
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were
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 almost identical to that of 2002. Pubs and shopping people were in a range between 7 and 17 over the period.
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young
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adult
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 who played bowling dropped gradually from 4 in 2002 to 1 in the final year.
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