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Band 3.5

Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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ncluding the holes in the ozone layer, the gas from factories, vehicles and the deforestation. The government and individuals, include us, have
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nd passing laws which contribute to protect the nature and punish those who break the laws. Because must be prevented by heavy law to deter those who intend to commit crimes. People play a major role in causing environmental pollution,
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, there are ways for us to overcome our harm, which has ruined the wildlife habitat. For each person, we can take practical action to save the Earth like stop throw rubbish, use public transport or ride a bike to work, etc. It can contribute to reducing emissions, slowing down the greenhouse effect and helping our home to be better.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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