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With increasing populations and ever growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protecting places of natural beauty? How can be solved?

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Numbers of countries are losing their beauty of
nature
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 very rapidly due to
rapid growth
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the rapid growth
 of populations and the construction of
city centers
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the city centre
city centre
. Reduction of environmental pollution and restoring healthy
ecosystem
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 can be the most major benefit
by
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of
 protecting the natural treasures. If reserve foresting and agricultural activities are taken in those areas, better result can be achieved
through out
all the way through
throughout
 the time. It would be benefited for
nature
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 as well as
human kind
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
humankind
 if man made pollution and disruption of
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ecosystem
Suggestion
the ecosystem
ecosystems
 can be reversed.
Firstly
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, environmental pollution, which bring cursed to people in the form of fatal diseases and natural disasters. So, with the help of control measures it will bring
wellbeing
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well being
 for all in the universe. In
absence
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the absence
 of, restoring
ecosystem
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 it would be not possible to live a healthy life. In the chain of
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ecosystem
Suggestion
the ecosystem
an ecosystem
, when every living
entities
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entity
 and whole physical environment work systematically, all species will get the benefit as a whole. In case of solution, reserve forest, which is introduced by many countries, is a very interactive way to come closer to
nature
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 s along with agricultural production can be an alternative
for
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to
 the growing population survival. When Reserve forest will be declared, civil construction work will be no longer possible.
As a result
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, beautiful places in
nature
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 will remain forever. Another best solution to meet the demand of
increasing population
Suggestion
an increasing population
 and keeping natural attraction all together by introducing controlled harvesting but it should not be open for all.
Otherwise
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, the total process can be ruined by mismanagement. To conclude, City
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 may
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 the purpose of consumer life when restoring
nature
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 is necessary to save
life
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lives
a life
the life
. By ensuring protection of
beauty hotspot
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the beauty hotspot
 of
nature
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, it is possible to gain long term benefit if solutions can be implemented in right time and
right place
Suggestion
the right place
.
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