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It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely
beleved
accept as true; take to be true
believed
 that these days wildlife is said to be the main concern of the countries throughout the globe and seen as a main field which is taking most of governments' investments.
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 essay totally disagrees with the statement and supports the belief that wildlife plays more important role in our lives than any of us would have ever thought. The way It is seen that, what are governments doing currently is a fair compensation for what they have done and been doing to the nature. Wildlife has been undergoing dramatic changes and suffers at the expanse of the rise of agricultural lands. To get abundant harvest, in every two months if not every, the land was poisoned with fertilizers, pesticides and other chemicals. Based on the results of the experiment that was found by natural science researchers, once the land is spread contaminants, it takes from the land thousands of years to turn back its original form If it ever can. On top of that, there is an unbreakable chain between the survival of mankind in the earth and the preservation and the well-being of the nature. Let`s take an example of the earth without bees. We, humans, never think how important role these tine livings play
inour
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in our
life
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lives
. Bees, in fact, pollinate 71 of the 100 crops that provide 90% of the world’s food and they don’t get anything in return. Do you think the annual spending of governments on wildlife projects is as high as the amount of money they do spend on food? To sum up, I get to say that the better we treat with the nature around us the, the more quality we live. It,
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, should not be the only responsibility of governments to take care of it, but
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 should be the main concern of every individual that resides in there.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • safeguard
  • natural habitats
  • foster
  • cultural of conservation
  • long-term ecological sustainability
  • economic benefits
  • significant source of revenue
  • investment
  • nation’s economic wealth
  • preservation of ecosystems
  • clean water and air
  • prioritization
  • multi-faceted government budgets
  • environmental protection
  • wildlife conservation
  • neglecting
  • detrimental effects
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