Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of society in which they are sold. to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Owing to the power of advertisements, products have been sold to people not actually requiring it. I agree

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with

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opinion, as commercials are made so glamorous nowadays that they tempt people to actually purchase them. The extensive increase of commercial and advertisements force people to buy items which

is not required

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are not required

by them. These firms

have identify

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have identified

the psyche of normal people and employ famous actors and

sports man

someone who engages in sports

sportsman

whose life is envied by

general population

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the general population

. They make the commercials so glamorous and out of the world that people in fact become

spell bound

having your attention fixated as though by a spell

spellbound

to buy them.

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has resulted in our people becoming brand conscious,

consequently

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with

new launch

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a new launch

the new launch

of Louis Vuitton and Gucci people rush to buy the products even they don’t require it. The advertisement

companies resulting

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companies, resulting

sale

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the sale

sales

of products

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are

successful in selling unnecessary things as they target young people and teenagers. They have a fragile mind and result in purchasing of unnecessary products.

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this

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is especially true for junk foods, when the famous actors are eating junk food or drinking soft drinks in a commercial but still appear slim and smart.

This

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persuades people that these junk

food

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foods

are not high calorie and not hazardous to health and they start consuming it.

On the contrary

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, the famous actors might not be using these unhealthy

food

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foods

and drinks in real life. In conclusion, the

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advertising

industry has turned

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mafia which is responsible for selling items not required by the people and

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tendency should be curbed at the earliest.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

259 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

consumer behavior
perceived need
lifestyle aspirations
brand image
prestige
psychological techniques
scarcity
social proof
celebrity endorsements
technological advancements
product innovations
emerging consumer needs

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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of society in which they are sold. to what extent do you agree or disagree.

Fully explain your ideas

Coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five cities in Australia

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, prefer to take risks and think that change is a positive thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

some people believe that it is good to shere as much information as possible in scintific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, most countries improve the standard of living through economic development. But some social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of the phenomenon outweigh the disadvantages.

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