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Some people think that the best way to run business is within the family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of a family run business?

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Nowadays, there are plenty of enterprises which facilitate the development of
economy
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the economy
 in every country. Some of the
company
 may be established by a family and which keep inherited by their children.
This
 situation is already quite common all over the world, people have seen it as a rule to let their descendant take over
thier
of them or themselves
their
business
. The following essay is going to talk about the pros and cons of a family run
business
. It is irrefutable that family members will well known about each others, not only the personality, but
also
 the
attitute
a complex mental state involving beliefs and feelings and values and dispositions to act in certain ways
attitude
 when they encounter some problems. If each
members
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member
 had already well understanding about themselves, the risk to occur a conflict will definitely be decreased.
Besides
, family members are more willing to help their siblings in any situation. They are closer than other colleague
,
Accept space
,
thus
 they can solve the problems without misunderstanding. In the meanwhile, the
eventually
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eventual
 target of running a
business
 is earning money. Without a doubt, family members are more pleased to share the profit that
make
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makes
is made
 by the
company
. On the flip side, a family run a
business
 means that they have to work together. A
company
 must have a boss to manage all the
business
, siblings may contest to get the right to be the one who in charge the
company
. It is going to break their relationship and jealous
to
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of
 others.
Furthermore
,
every one
all people
everyone
 has their own ideal to do the job which they are interested.
Family
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A family
 which
run
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runs
a
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an
 enterprise usually forced their family members to take part in their
company
. It is unfair to them because they cannot exchange their potential
at
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in
 the area they are really good at. In conclusion, even though
business
 which run by a family is not a bad idea for
make
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making
 money together, those families still cannot exploit the rights from their children or siblings to
at
take in solid food
eat
tend
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Tend
 the
occupation they
Accept comma addition
occupation, they
 are interested.
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