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In general, people do not have such a close relationship with their neighbours as they did in the past. Why is this so, and what can be done to improve contact between neighbours?

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Nowadays, neighbours roll in our life less than ever
before even
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before, even
 some people do not know their neighbours. In the past, the relationship with neighbours and the
neighbourhood
atmospher
a particular environment or surrounding influence
atmosphere
 played an important
roll
the actions and activities assigned to or required or expected of a person or group
role
 in their lives. There are different reasons why neighbours
conictions
a relation between things or events (as in the case of one causing the other or sharing features with it)
connections
 are weaker than the previous
decates
a discussion in which reasons are advanced for and against some proposition or proposal
debates
.
First
 of all, the working place in the past was in the same house or the
neighbourhood
, but now with the
developed
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developmental
 transformation there are no
lemits
the greatest possible degree of something
limits
 for
destance
the property created by the space between two objects or points
distance
. As well as, working hours extended
commpering
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compared
comparing
 with the past.
Secondly
, people
prefare
like better; value more highly
prefer
prepare
preferred
 indoor
activeties
any specific behavior
activities
 and the
soucial
relating to human society and its members
social
 media platforms more than before
that make
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that, make
 spending time in the home more
engoyable
affording satisfaction or pleasure
enjoyable
.
Finally
, the close shops and online shopping make us independent more than before that we do not need our neighbours help.
On the other hand
, there are a number of
stratigies
an elaborate and systematic plan of action
strategies
 that improve contact between neighbours.
Firstly
, we could
estaplish
set up or found
establish
 platforms for helping each other by lending equipment for each others.
For example
, in our
neighbourhood
 there is a platform for renting goods that you do not need it now for the neighbours for free or for
point
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points
the point
 that you can use it in the future.
Next
, We could make a
wellcoming
very cordial
welcoming
 party for the new neighbours in the
neighbourhood
 council.
Lastly
, the government could do for each
neighbourhood
 a playground or small park for having some gathering between neighbours in the weekend. In conclusion, these
strtigies
an elaborate and systematic plan of action
strategies
 will not make the
neighbourhood
 efficient as before.
However
, they
will make relationship
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will make a relationship
 with neighbours stronger and better than what we live now.
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