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Governments should focus their spending on public services rather than on arts such as Music and painting. To what extent agree or disagree

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Many divergent views exist on how the
government
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 should spend its
money
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. A great number of people, including myself are of the opinion that
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government
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the government
 should allocate
money
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 on social infrastructure rather than arts. In the following paragraphs; I will provide the rationale for my viewpoints as well as proffer justification for my own opinion. The primary reason upon which my belief is based, that spending more
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money
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 on social services could improve people’s quality of life. It goes without saying that social services
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 as schools, highways and public transport give a common man the ability to do his job in the most efficient way possible. Unsurprisingly, a 2019 social experiment conducted by a group of social researchers from the University of Toronto, Canada found that if the
government
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 did not spend enough
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 on education sector
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 there is a probability that most of our children would not be able to pursue high-quality education. Not only does
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 policy lead to an increase in people’s quality of life, but it
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 generates/creates employment. It stands to
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 that more and more
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 spent on infrastructure would increase the number of jobs for workers, engineers.
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 pattern would
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 enable factories to produce more materials for these projects and recruit more staff to complete their tasks on time. My university course mate, Ben, is a shining example of
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, Ben, who came from a very poor family in a small town and a family of farmers tried very hard and successfully completed the four-year undergraduate course at the University of Toronto. Before he knew it, he was offered a well- paying position in local construction company as an engineer. The annual income he receives is way higher than the salary he could have been given by any farming job. To sum up, I hold to the opinion that spending
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 on social services has
range
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a range
 of benefits for both people and society, and I would like to say that the
government
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 should spend more
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 on social infrastructure projects
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 of investing
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 on arts
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 as music and painting.
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