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Some people say that every human being can create art,for example painting.Others think only the people born with the ability can create art.Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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ome would rather choose
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hey don’t eschew what they do.So those who have jobs associated with
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 try to create a great job even if it is just a leisure activity like painting. Turning to the other side,
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