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Shopping is becoming more and more popular as a leisure activity. However, some people feel that this has both positive and negative effects. Why is shopping so popular?

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The trend of shopping is growing rapidly among people. Many people consider pleasure
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 while others say that it is the waste of
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. So, in
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 essay I will discuss my both views and als give some suggestions. As the world gets a vast people’s perception has changed a lot.
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, There are huge amount of shopping malls to attract people especially women.
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, they do enjoy shopping with their family and friends. Other than that many companies offers a variety of discounts on stores, credit cards which appeal young generation. So they will not do shopping just for
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 for others. The vogue shopping has an impact great for consumers. Their sales are increasing quickly which may be
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 people have less interest in other healthy leisure activities.
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 as many gyms, sports club is mostly empty because they prefer to go shopping mall. Many years back people used to play games to stay healthy. Like tennis, cricket, badminton but now shopping trend has destroyed all these activities.In the same way they give less attention to their kids. Because they become Shopaholic. Kids are now under the care of maids. The training of kids is not going well due to lack of care. In concluding, I would say that everything should have limits. Shopping should be much as needs.We do not spend our whole spare
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 on shopping. We should adopt a healthy life by playing games and spend our precious
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 with our families.
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