More and more people are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to look for work. What will be the consequences of this? What solutions can you offer?

Many persons from
farmer
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farmer's
lands migrate to cities for new job opportunities. These migrations have some serious
affects
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
and it can lead to issues
for
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in
their
country but
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country, but
some appropriate policies might solve these problems. Moving from countryside to cities results in some main difficulties for the countries. From economical point of view, when
workforce
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the workforce
of rural
area
starts changing their residents to urban
area
they weaken agricultural industries and
this
situation lead to importing more farming products
such
as meats and crops from other countries. Another negative point is that when they are relocating to urban it may end up decreasing the living quality of residents of cities. In crowded cities, there are
tough competition
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tough, competition
for job opportunities and suitable accommodation among the citizens who are trying to improve their life standards and by entering new residents that want to achieve a job
however
it can be possible the situations will be more inappropriate. I think the increasing movement from rural
area
to cities will be decreased if the politicians introduce some encouraging rules for the farmers. By giving the loans to agricultural
professions
a person engaged in one of the learned professions
professionals
to expand their business and employ more persons from their
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
there will not be any reasons to move cities for searching unrelated and low payment works. Another solution to prevent rural people from migration to cities is to eliminate taxes in those areas and prepare conditions for them to improve their business in their homeland. In conclusion, movement of workforce of rural
area
can lead to dependency of country to other countries to import main necessary products while if the farmers encourage and support by government these problems will be solved.
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