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Many people today are choosing to travel to other countries. Why is this happening? Is this a positive or negative development?

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people
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 today are choosing to
travel
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 internationally.
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 positive development is mainly because of a rise in
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 income
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 advances in aviation.
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 today can afford to
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 as it has become more convenient. The
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 half century has seen wages in both developed and developing companies climb with the concomitant expansion of the global middle class. Workers have the disposable income to
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 that they lacked in the past.
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 has been complemented with safer
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 so individuals are not afraid to fly. Airfares have
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 become cheaper as companies like Boeing produce more efficient planes, competition intensifies between competing airlines, and the supply more than meets
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 for flights. These factors combined have spawned a golden age of international
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. Looking at the opportunity in perspective, it is hard to see the advent of international
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 as anything less than one of mankind’s greatest achievements. For the entirety of human history, most
people
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 lived and died near where they were born. Anyone who wanted to
travel
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 to another country had to possess enormous wealth, time, and courage. Today, the average employee can save up and
travel
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 to see the wonders of the
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 in Southern Europe, the vast monuments of history and modernity in China, or explore any other corner of the Earth that has piqued their interest.
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 is an unprecedented opportunity unavailable to past generations. In conclusion, international
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 is a byproduct of the modern age and we should all be grateful for its possibility. There are clear environmental drawbacks, but those should not blind
people
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 to its benefits
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advancements in transportation
  • Cultural curiosity
  • Economic reasons
  • Globalization
  • Educational opportunities
  • Digital nomadism
  • Healthcare tourism
  • Tourism industry growth
  • Personal development
  • Interconnectedness
  • Higher living standards
  • Remote work
  • Broaden their horizons
  • Affordable travel
  • Medical treatments
  • Global perspective
  • Air travel options
  • Cuisines
  • Lifestyles
  • Job opportunities
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