You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English-speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture.

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Dear sir, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the weathered furniture of your rented house. I along with my parents have shifted to your rented house on the 1st of

this

month (May 2020). I am upset with the condition of furniture that

refers to the speaker or writer

believe was previously in use of careless people who used it roughly neglecting its maintenance.

Firstly

, the door knobs are so weak that the very moment I tried to open the door it came in my hand.

Secondly

, the bed in the master bedroom is broken and its

mattres

the tangible substance that goes into the makeup of a physical object

materials

mattress

is spoiled

Suggestion

are spoiled

are spoilt

to the extend that one can't even sit or stand by it as it smells like a rotten food.

Thirdly

, the cabinets in the kitchen have mould and mildew stuck on them.

Lastly

, the weary and springy couches in the tv lounge makes it almost impossible to sit on it. The shabby and neglected state of the furniture makes me think that you do not care about your renters either. It seems that profit is more valued than the renters comfort. I have paid you the said amount exact on time and

this

is not what

refers to the speaker or writer

expected. Highly disappointed. Please address

this

issue as a matter of urgency. Sincerely

Zaima

a constitutional monarchy on the western part of the islands of Samoa in the South Pacific

Samoa

Aly.

Submitted by huzamia on Mon May 18 2020

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0Word repetition
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5Grammar mistakes
 

9 paragraphs

209 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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