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Some people believe that it's fairer to assess a students ability based on their performance during the whole course rather than giving a formal examination at the end of the course. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #students #ability #performance #course #examination
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It is
belived
accept as true; take to be true
believed
 that
students' formation
Suggestion
the students' formation
 should be evaluated through the school term and not with a massive final exam at the end. In
this
 essay I will explain why I agree with the statement above. Allowing students to be judged
/
assessed during the whole year could have many
benfits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
.
Firstly
, an imminent test will probably push students to be more focused and prepared. A constant pressure might be a tough enemy to deal with,
however
this
 will "forge" a person
(
Accept space
(
pupil?)
to
Suggestion
To
 be ready for their future job, where respecting deadlines and being able to
work
 under pressure are skills that
all companies requires
Suggestion
requires all companies
.
Secondly
, students will probably be forced to study often, and
this
 practice it is known to be extremely efficient, not only because it will ease
/
relieve the workload but it will
also
 increase their mnemonic skills. In fact, from
/
in my own experience, I have noticed that through the daily study my memory has improved as well as my confidence of
/
on?
the
Suggestion
The
 subject matter. In
additon
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
,
this
 is
also
 the reason why intensive courses are considered to be so effective.
Lastly
, a continuous assessment could be an effective way for testing particular subjects
such
 as technical drawing or design, whereas a retaining exam could not reflect objectively the student's ability, relying on one single draw
/
project.
On the other hand
, being constantly up to date (keeping up?)
might
Suggestion
Might
 be challenging for somebody who has a full-scheduled agenda.
For example
, a young guy
(
Accept space
(
student) who practices some extra-curricular activities or sports, have to be able to combine personal commitments with schoolwork.
Nonetheless
, the idea of a load of
work
 left behind must be
scarier
Suggestion
scary
(
Accept space
(
worriesome
not reassuring; tending to cause anxiety
worrisome
?). To sum up, somebody
consider
Suggestion
considers
 the continual assessment of the students' path a better method than a formal and final examination. In my view,
although
 the ultimate test could seemingly be less stressful, it might actually overloads the student's
work
. An ongoing (in progress?)
tracking
Suggestion
Tracking
 of
/
in scholars' progressions could enhance their mental abilities and train them for their
next
 future steps.
(
Accept space
(
in
Suggestion
In
 the labour market-world of
work
?)
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