In some countries , government likes to spend more money to spent money on art. Some people agree with this. However, others think government should on health and health discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Since recent decades, some

government

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governors

have spent their money on arts to beautify their countries. Which

set

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sets

the trend of debate that whether government funds should use for

art

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or health and education sectors. I personally believe that public facilities are paramount over

art

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with,

art

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represents the nation’s cultures and traditions and attract tourist towards it.

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, it contributes to raise countries wealth.As an example of it, India has recently built world tallest sculpture in 2019 which raised its tourist level up by thirty percent than before.

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art

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creation centre, museum and beautifully designed buildings reduce stress and make people more focus and

productive

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productivity

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, financial intervention is required to make surrounding

cozy

enjoying or affording comforting warmth and shelter especially in a small space

cosy

for residents.

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ordinary pupils demand to disburse money into

healthcare

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health care

and schooling sector, due to serious reasons. If a country has adequate medical services and equipment for treating patients,

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citizens would definitely be healthy to work hard and enhance national capital production.

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, Investing in schooling to enable people to read and write which promises the national prosperity in several ways.

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, establishing new business which leads to more job opportunities.

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, highly qualified doctors and nurses to maintain

healthy population

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healthy populations

a healthy population

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, the expertise researchers to discover new ideas for society’s betterment.

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, these both factors

ensures

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ensure

the economic progress with literate and fit workers. In conclusion, it is inevitable that

art

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plays

vital role

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a vital role

in relaxing citizen and earning chips from foreigners.

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, the health education cannot overemphasized, because these are the essential tools of developing countrys

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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In some countries , government likes to spend more money to spent money on art. Some people agree with this. However, others think government should on health and health discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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