In the modern world, people are no longer necessary to use food from animals or product from animals such as medicine and clothing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that these days

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we use too

much

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many

animals sources products like food

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clothing items

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medicine. In my opinion

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I believe we should limit the use of animals for our purposes The

first

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question is

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Do we really need animals food

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In the century, our living has been depended on these sources for daily nutrients like protein

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vitamin and

furthermore

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it helps prevent various health issues like cancer

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blood disease

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heart attack.

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the other hand

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instead

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of sacrificing an animal’s life for a meal

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the vegetarian campaign has been called widely for a change to human can have a better health

beacause

for the reason that; on account of

because

it provides the same amount of nutrients for consumers. In reality

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mushroom

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beans or seaweed contains a higher protein, a kind nutrient only in meat

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and can be a substitute. In

term

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terms

of clothing

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I strongly believe animals fashion has pollution

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economy

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economic

problems and the development of science can fix it

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There are similar materials from plants or

artificial that

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artificial, that

artificially that

can be

fulfill

completed to perfection

fulfilled

our needs. Animals do not have to

suffered

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suffer

from our ‘fashionable’ or be used like a decoration

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Talking to medicine

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animals

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animal

testing has not only played

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important role in

medical industry but

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the medical industry, but

the medical industry but

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is a hot subject

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the humanitarian issue.

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, thanks to the breakthroughs in technology

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now we have

animals experiment

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an animal experiment

animal experiment

in computer programs which be used a safety testing for new drugs or research

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medicine

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In conclusion

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I think we have to limit use animals for our needs and aim to a world without slaughter

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If it come true , we would have a better world for ourselves

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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294 words

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In the modern world, people are no longer necessary to use food from animals or product from animals such as medicine and clothing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that violent sports such as martial arts and boxing should be banned from international competitions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Most people take interviews to select a person for a job. What are the other ways? What do you think is the best way to recruit new employees?

Today many children and teenagers are overweight and unhealthy. Give reasons to explain why many young people are obese and give some solutions to fix the problem.

Some people think that the education system should only focus on preparing students for employment, while others believe it has other important functions. Discuss both sides and then give your own opinion.

In many countries crime rates among teenagers are higher than among other groups.What are the causes for this problem and what can be done to solve this?