In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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In most countries, parents and teachers have serious problems with ad
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t school (There are many aggressive treatments and) with disobediences from teachers. I think there are several reasons for
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problem and we take some actions to improve
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situation. It seems to me
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s normal for students at
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age, which must be controlled by schools. They must have a plan to change their
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, it seems that the root of many pupil’s problems is caused by age-problem issues which we can see in their
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During puberty age the body produces hormones which affect their
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nd they tend to be aggressive and show quick actions. It seems
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is normal reactions which are not intentional. I believe that we can take to tackle to control students’
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Schools must have plans which lead to adolescents’ emotions discharge and observe some sports competitions that students could empty their energy.
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, weekly schedules of schools must include physical activity
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as playing soccer or doing martial arts. If we can discharge students’ excitement at
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, other causes of pupils’
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eturn to celebrities which always pupils follow as a be
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Unfortunately, in most cases celebrities tend to show that they are different from others to be more famous than before. Nowadays, the most famous people like to say that they had hated school and left it before finishing and always had broken the rules.
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f celebrities leads to adolescents behaving disobedient so celebrities must understand their
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model and must be trained to know how to treat in the social.
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, I think one of the important reasons is movies and games, most of which are produced fo
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age range include violent scenes. Nowadays, students have a cell phone and spend most of their time playing games or watching movies, so they are affected and imitate the character’s
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, production of violent scenes film must be stopped and controlled by related organizations. In conclusion, schools must have a plan on how to control students’
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nd release pupils’ excitement by increasing their physical activities.
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, celebrities act as a
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model and have a responsibility in the social.
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, directors must create movies and games without violent scenes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental guidance
  • discipline
  • moral guidance
  • social media
  • detrimental
  • bullying
  • peer pressure
  • overcrowded
  • disengagement
  • disruptive behavior
  • behavioral policies
  • code of conduct
  • parental involvement
  • social and emotional learning (SEL)
  • empathy
  • responsible decisions
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