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Some people think that online reading materials are better for children. Others argue that traditional paper-based resources are better. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Technology, these days
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These days, technology
have replaced
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has replaced
 many things, one of them is teaching techniques. There are some who advocate the advanced technology for teaching a
child
 online while others still prefer the traditional methodology using printed material. I believe that
online mode
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the online mode
 is preferred by some due to ease of the material available at any given point and time. One can easily choose online material based on a
child
's
capabilies
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capability
capabilities
,
also
 making the learning experience interesting and challenging. Online material
are created
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is created
 keeping in my any contingencies that may arise during the reading sessions.
For example
, if a young student is learning to read English as a
second
 language, there are websites which offer pages with link to dictionaries so they can look up for meaning in their native language.
Such
 functionalities make the learning process more convenient for both the student and the teacher.
On the other hand
, there are some who want to go with the traditional printed materials like newspapers or books to enhance a
child
's reading skills. One of the cogent reasons could be the proven history of
this
 method. Except for the dyslexic students, almost nobody has so far cited books as their reason for their learning disabilities. Physical materials
such
 as books do not have the side effects
such
 as eye strain caused by the electronic gadgets.
Also
, given the negative effects, it is justified for parents and teachers to be apprehensive about introducing technology to students earlier than it is absolutely necessary.
For instance
, reading of books has never caused sore eyes or neck stiffness, but reading from a PC or a mobile phone can certainly cause these health hazards. In my opinion, a pragmatic rather than a hard-nosed approach is the most efficient approach. Rather than shunning online material or the printed
matieral
the tangible substance that goes into the makeup of a physical object
material
materials
, a good blend of both should be utilized to provide an effective learning experience
to
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for
 a
child
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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