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The charts below the percentages of male and female students getting grades in 1960 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main futurist and make comparisons where relevant

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number
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a number
 of
mayo
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mayors
 and female students getting top grades in 1960 and 2000. The year 1960 enjoy the relatively high level of
science
 and that mess approximately 30-35
number
 of male students comparing to arts roughly, just below 10 quantity of male people. Meanwhile, moderate levels of languages and Humanities-just over 20
percent
. But in 2000 amount of male student significant changed, humanity
is generally increase
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is generally increasing
has generally increased
generally increases
 at around 40
percent
. The
percentage
 of math and
science
 considerably different from
others
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the others
, it was estimated between 10 and 20 percents. More specifically, languages and the arts had
moderate
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a moderate percentage
percentage
 of male students nearly 20
percent
.
we
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We
 should regard to female students in 1960 the figures have
much higher point
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a much higher point
such
 as
number
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the number
 of
languages approximately
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languages, approximately
 45
percent
 comparing to
science
 and math about 5 and 10
percent
 respectively.
However
, Humanities and arts
has
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have
 moderate level of female students about 30
percent
. Yet in 2000 more specifically, languages have the highest point of the students, just 30
percent
.
according
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According
 to
science
 and mess did not change and that have the lowest points between 5 and 10 respectively.
However
 the
percentage
 of arts and Humanities degrees it nearly by 5
percent
.
Also
 noteworthy is the fact that
number
 of mayo students which get high grade were increased,
however
,
percentage
 of female students were decreased
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