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some people believe that after child enters School their teachers influence more than the parents to what extent do you agree or disagree

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The majority of parents think that the
influence
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 of teachers on their children is more
powerfull
having great power or force or potency or effect
powerful
. Overall, I wholeheartedly disagree with
this
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 statement because parents and teachers have
completely different
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a completely different influence
influence
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 on children upbringing where parents play
more essential role
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a more essential role
.
Firstly
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, few people can deny the fact that parents have been
influencing
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influenced
 on children since birth, thereof children enter to
school
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 with some base of behaviour, which bring from home. Teachers the most complain,
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, on home upbringing because some pupils come rude and
mischievious
naughtily or annoyingly playful
mischievous
.
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, have been noticed by many teachers that throughout
entire educational
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the entire educational process
process
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 behaviours of pupils have been unchanging.
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, parents always have crucial role on children, even when they in
school
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.
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, teachers throughout all educational
process
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 have been
developing
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developed
 at students some social skills as part of educational
program
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programs
 and demands studying
process
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. In my
school
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,
for instance
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, we have subject "Ethic" that consist of common social rules,
additionally
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 all teachers are demanding discipline and comply with hierarchy.
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, the
influence
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 of teachers
have
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has
 more common character than parents because teachers teach groups of young people share rules, whereas parents give traditions, habits and even a point of view on many things
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in
 one.
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, teachers cannot be more
influence
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 due to they have
completely different type
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completely different types
a completely different type
 of impact and time. To conclude, all the time that children enter
to
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school
school
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 parents bother about many factors and one is
upbringing their
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upbringing, their
 children,
inusmach
(followed by as) in such a degree; in such a manner; seeing that; considering that; since
inasmuch
in-asmuch
insomuch
 as teachers play some role
on
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in
this
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process
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.
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, parents miss one small detail that children a half of day in educational establishments where studying in groups, thereby teachers cannot have enough time for teaching an individual person.
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, I believe that parents have the most powerful impact on children.
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