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With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, with the outstanding development of modern technology, more and more people are using social communication to provide themselves with an opportunity to make friends. Personally,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 agree with the opinion that with social network, people could make more friends. Using the internet to communicate gives people an opportunity to make new friends from distant countries, with different backgrounds and with mutual interests. There are many social apps
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 as Facebook, Instagram, ...
which
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 connects people from all around the world.
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, people from different parts of the world share their ideas, cognize unknown cultures and hobbies.
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, distance does not matter, as all they need is a computer or smartphone, they can reduce their homelessness by giving their family a video call through the Internet in their free time.
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, some people tend to use the Internet as a tool to avoid social interactions. Gradually, they become distant from their friends and family. The shortage of outdoor activities can
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 cause serious health problems. In conclusion, online communication is beneficial in some
ways but
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ways, but
 it can
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 raise numerous concerns if not used properly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • geographical gaps
  • interact
  • social media platforms
  • messaging apps
  • revolutionized
  • physical distance
  • online communities
  • camaraderie
  • immediate surroundings
  • unparalleled opportunities
  • superficial relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • emotional warmth
  • tactile comfort
  • digital communication
  • digital divide
  • internet censorship
  • global connectivity
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