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A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#country #population #mixture #nationalities
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While many people assume that nationality
mixture
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 is irrelevant to the
development
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 of a
country
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, in my opinion, it plays
crucial role
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a crucial role
 for both the entertainment and
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development
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the development
 of a
country
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.
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, having a various
mixture
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 of nationalities can bring in cultural diversity, which means different kinds of core values, traditions, entertainment activities and dining rituals. All these deviations can result in
diverse society
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a diverse society
 with many
enjoyful
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 events that makes the base of an interesting lifestyle as a whole.
For example
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, Mongolia has many ethnic groups that all have sub-cultures. So, various activities are organized throughout the year. Due to
this
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, we are able to experience pleasant ceremonies and enjoy many foods, which brings us all together as a
country
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 and enables interesting experiences.
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 why I strongly believe that having different nationalities is a key to an adventurous society.
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,
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country's
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the country's development results
development
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 results from many contributing factors, but the reason why being a blend of nationalities is important is as different people have varying viewpoints and skills, so does different groups. So, the
country
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 is more able to build a society
that is
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 more structured and segmented evenly, which causes a rapid
development
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. As an example,
USA
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the USA
 is a
mixture
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 of many ethnic groups,
thus
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 they are able to become one of the most powerful nation in the world. They are able to attract more tourists and develop all of their crucial segments equally. To conclude, I agree that
country
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's
development
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 and entertainment is facilitated by the different
mixture
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 of groups. My reasoning is based on two main thoughts. When population is divided into nationality groups, the
country
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 is able to become more interesting
as a result
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 of different culture they bring and more developed due to their skill sets and opinions.
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